It is clear that many of the ills that plague our lives today stem from a lack of self-discipline. Besides obesity, drunkenness and incurable or dangerous diseases, poor self-control also leads to crime, dropping out of school, intense frustration with one's lot in life and gangsterism. All these ills affect not only the individual involved but loved ones and society at large as well.
Education plays an important role in instilling discipline. Students learn that they have to adhere to rules and obey their teachers and in every aspect of school life, self-discipline is reinforced. And thus, I agree that the school should become a place of discipline.
To begin with, now a day the students are rude towards teachers when the teachers were teaching in class. They interrupt the lesson by talking to classmates, not paying attention, shouting and walking around without teacher's permission.
Secondly, they did not obey the school rules- they alter their skirts or pants to a shorter length, tuck out their shirts, wear ankle socks, dye their hair and wear accessories.
Also, they dare to talk back to teachers even knowing its their fault. They fight in as a gang outside and smoke which ruins the school reputation.
On the other hand, the students are not allowed to ask questions , they will not be able to clarify their mistakes. Thus, their grades will drop.
And, if the discipline is too oppressive, the students will have less freedom though school is a place for them to learn, play and know more about the society. As a result, they will tend to repel due to the less freedom they have in school.
Furthermore, they will end up hating school and will not be attending school since the discipline is very strict to them and this will ruin their future.
Self-discipline is an important prerequisite for success in life. Without it, one's health and personal well-being as well as the well-being of our society will be at stake thus, school should become a place of discipline.
Done by: Phylicia
There are some rather impressive points here. I liked how you defined discipline in the first paragraph and how you managed to tie it back to the role of schools in this.
ReplyDeleteAdditionally, you have really good organisation, which is probably why you managed to pull off that feat mentioned above. Great!
Now, the only problem which I feel brings your grade down is how your grammar moves between past and present tense and some slight spelling errors.
For example, in paragraphs 3 & 4, you spelt "nowadays" as "now a day". Also, you begin para 4 with "Secondly they DID not obey the school rules", which is in past tense when the rest of your essay is more or less in present tense.
Other than this however, it was a pretty well-written essay.