Yes, we think that school should be a place of discipline but not with harsh punishments.
First of all,without any disciplinary action taken by the teachers; there will be no difference between schools and the streets. We are supposed to be the one who try our best listening attentively to the teacher. When we interrupted the teachers’ lectures it means that we are wasting our own time. So when a teacher disciplined us it is actually a good thing, because you can always reflect back what your mistake is after that.
Secondly,disciplinary action is the only hope that good students could have.They wish noisy students to be quiet but if they do not keep silence in class room,students have to rely on teachers' disciplinary action for bad students.
Lastly,the school should be a place of discipline as students spend most of the day in school,and also in singapore students spend 6 years in primary school,4 or 5 years in secondary school and about 2 to 3 years in poly,jc so discipline is very important during these years in their life.what a student learns in school and theirdiscipline will affect their life as they grow up. if teachers do not disicpline the students in their early stage of life,they will tend to stray and might get into trouble with the law.
and also the values taught in school will help a student in their life.
However,disciplinary action may be a good think but it is not the thing for me. If a teacher is scolding the whole class, does not it mean that it is wasting more time? School is a place for learning. If all teachers spent too much time scolding us, the school will not be a conducive place of learning anymore.
Second of all,teachers' disciplinary actions are too harsh for the young students.They give students detentions which takes students up around 4 hours.While students are detained,they are ordered to copy the whole school rules.They have their own time to meet mates after school hours and have tuitions for school subjects but teachers ignore their own time and waste each student's precious 4 hours.
I lastly think that a school is a place where students have fun,make friends and become a better person.
for a student to have fun,make friends and be a better person the student must not be too stressed or be in a controlled environment.and too much discipline will stress a student such that they may not perform well in school.school is where ideas are created and goals are achieved so a school should not be place of discipline but a lace of fun and happiness
As conclude, think that discipline in school is very important as students spend most of their time in school and students learn better when they are with their friends.
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You have some interesting points and organisation is pretty good as well. Please take note of the following:
ReplyDeleteWhen you say "However", it means you're going to argue the opposite of what you have argued so far. In this case, since you have argued that schools should be a place of discipline, the paragraphs including and after the "However" paragraph should be the opposite.
While you HAVE done that, which is very good, your 1st sentence makes me think that you won't - "However,disciplinary action may be a good think..."
What you can do to change it is say "However, although disciplinary action may be a good thing, it is not the thing for me."
In addition, you may also consider that you should put "In addition" or "moreover" for the 6th paragraph instead of "Secondly", especially since you didn't begin with "Firstly".
Lastly, the grammar in the conclusion is rather poor. Please revise. "As conclude" should be "In conclusion", and "think that discipline" should be "in our opinion, we think that..." among other things.
Overall, it was a good effort. Keep it up.