Enforcing discipline on children can prove to be difficult and frustrating.In this era,students have become more rebellious and lack discipline.Therefore,I agree that school should be a place of discipline,
Firstly,as working parents don't spend much time with their children,school can be another place for children to train on their behaviour.While some teachers have the ability to maintain the class in order just by stepping into the class ,others have difficulties to maintain class of unruly and naughty students in order.The principle(leader of the school)patrols the schoolto tighten discipline and to think of students for truancy and deliquency.
However,character building starts at home and parents understand the child best.some teachers may not understand the student well and may misunderstand their thoughts and feelings.Therefore,the child may be treated and disciplined wrongly and thus lacks the correct sense of discipline.
In conclusion,I feel that the school should be a place of discipline as to train the student to differentiate the rights and the wrongs.However,teachers plays an important role to understand each and every of the student he or she coaches and to upbring them according to their requirements so the students could accomplish more.
There are some grammar errors, but overall, organization was pretty good.
ReplyDeleteDo take note though - you should not end your conclusion with "However" in the last paragraph. It feels as though you're beginning another point, which you aren't actually - you're reinforcing an earlier point (which is excellent).
What you can do instead, is say, "As a result, teachers play an important role.." This would give your reader a really good sense of what your opinion is.